|Reviews for Animalistic|
| simpleplan13 chapter 2 . 4/3/2008
I like this... though I think a semi-colon might work better than a colon. The description of the chimp was nice and the last line was interesting.
| simpleplan13 chapter 3 . 4/3/2008
it's cute and sweet, especially with the a/n to explain. Nicely done.
| Chidori Nadare chapter 1 . 4/2/2008
I like this, especially the imagery on the first line. 'Winding up her prey...' made me think of fairy tales for some reason. Don't know about the last line though, there's something that is not quite right. Good job and keep writing.
| Living-mishima chapter 1 . 3/28/2008
Yes, you may have the syllabus right, but what you lacking now is a 'kigo'. A haiku traditionally contains a kigo (season word) representative of the season in which the poem is set, or a reference to the natural world. So whatever you wrote here is not a haiku at all, but more of a Senryu.
| ygg chapter 1 . 3/15/2008
Very choking last line :) Nice, dense description!
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 3/14/2008
yay for getting the right syllables... I like the spider imagery it is very nice