|Reviews for View of the World|
| emmaliefje chapter 1 . 3/23/2008
I haven't read anything like this before. It's cute. You really established a certain rhythm, like ants walking :P
Well done! :D
| Tranquil Thorns chapter 1 . 3/14/2008
Wonderful job looking through an ant's eyes.
Poor thing isn't even allowed to look at the sky. / I like the little chant you incorporate - the ant's brainwashed, unquestioning obeisance to the Queen. 'Leaves/drag endlessly/through vast deserts' is a haunting image. I like the short, halting, distracted lines; they really add to the narration.
| In the Rye chapter 1 . 3/14/2008
maybe since its from an ant's perspective you can build more on serving the queen, and less about looking at the sky. because it feels more like a person inside an ant than an ant itself. but keep the language simple, since it is just an ant after all.