Reviews for memories
half-sketched.staccatos chapter 1 . 3/16/2008
konnichi wa

I think my favorite part was the beginning where you described it as "a field of sunflowers / you pass every day to the bus-stop / but never noticed." It just really made it real for me because I can picture myself doing that. There are so many things you pass by every single, single day and never notice because you don't take the time to LOOK. So that was really beautiful.

Hm, I would love for you to write a sequel... meaning, I want to know what the memories were - specific ones, you know? This was really touching. :) I want to know more; I'm craving more.

Ha det

-Shan-
Time To Change chapter 1 . 3/16/2008
That was extremely sweet. It brought a smile to my face - let me appreciate the good parts again.

I think maybe you could take out the words "to the bus stop" and leave the rest of the line on its own 'cause I think it effects the rhythm somewhat.

Good work, well done.
alicer chapter 1 . 3/16/2008
suddenly, they spring

like a field of sunflowers

you pass everyday to the bus-stop

but never noticed.

not sure i like this

BUT the ending really did it for me. :)

made the whole poem worth it.

quite good.
a silenced revolution chapter 1 . 3/16/2008
memories can be comforting.

then again, they can hurt too.

nice.
W. Griffin chapter 1 . 3/16/2008
that poem is great!

i can really relate to it!

write on!

-w. griffin