I like how you described it. Great job, and keep writing!

This was insanely beautiful. Excellent job; I can't think of anything that's wrong with it. I wish more writers on FP had even half of the talent you seem to have.

"Death mocks and comes

to visit sometimes

with his creative suicidal thoughts

and even though i hang out with him

for a while

i have the sense to walk away"

I love that, i know the feeling it gives. The ending is perfect.