I really love the whole "Love conquers all." theme here, it's great! now there were a few typos here and there and not all of it had that great beat that made it more poem-y. (Yes, I know that's not a word, but please bear with me.) I loved the plot though, I even thought that the dark haired sister should die because she hated, but I didn't WANT her to because it wouldn't be a happy ending, so I'm glad that she was saved by love, that was just perfect! AWESOME job, FAVED!

Write on!

This is like listening to a minstrel or something. i find it really intriging. When I first started reading I wasn't sure that you put it in the right category, but I honestly don't think that there is any better one for it that I know of. Now I need to read on or I'm going to die of will to read!

Write on!

If I chose one fav line, it would be: "Pain and peril stayed close to her heel as she climbed." I just liked the imagery. There were many lines that inspired me, though.

When it seemed as though the sister would die, I was thinking, "This is a happy ending?" Glad she was brought from the brink.

Write on! - M.T.

I clicked on this thinking it was in story format. So, I began with disappointment. The more I read, the more I became intrigued. You have a great sense of measure. You also know how to give just enough info to capture the imagination.

My fav line:

"The sisters lived and served as one

United hearts, undying love"

I hope I enjoy ch. 2 as much... M.T.

Wonderful! It's finaly up! Now I can tell you what I think of it. It was very well written, I like the flow of it, I also like how you're telling a story using poetry. This is a fine peice of work, and I look foreward to reading what's more to come.

Keep Writing!

Double AA

Whoa, thats different

your telling a story, thru lines though not really, and its not really poetry because, well poetry is the soul seeking the outside world, and that manifests in everything you empty your soul into. Its different and I like different.

So hope you write more.

TT

btw you always came to me as a person who liked happy endings.