This seems like a really good start and makes me think of cinderella or snow white, where the mother dies. Also I love the premise!

please, pretty, pretty please continue!

This is awfully cute; I wish you would continue. Then again, you're such an amazing writer with so many duties to be done... I doubt you have much time, hm?

It may have been pesky, but you definitely got it right! The fairytale part was perfect, and I found the change into the actual story narrative abrupt and jarring, but wonderful because of that. I loved it! PLEASE continue with this eventually! :-)

OMG , So good! As is most of your writing. ;) Please continue it, I'm excited!

Lovely. It most definitely sounded like a fairytale. I can't wait to see how this turns out. Best of luck writing, Katica Locke, that is: if you continue!

You did perfectly well with the fairy tale part. The rest is equally as enticing. I for one (can't speak for everyone) would like to see more.

Wow I'm looking forward to this. I guess it's a bit like Cinderella with an extra twist. Please update soon! :)

Okay, this is amazing! Your delivery was so well carried out. It really was a fairy tale until Illias began his part. Then it just got real life. Then it ended. Ggrr.. next chapter.

i thought it sounded like a fairy tale..actually i just watched south parks "critter christmas' epsiode and i kept thinking of stan's dad narrating the whole story like he did for that episode while reading this. but anyways, i really liked it.

hm, not quiet a fairytale, I wouldn't say. More like one of those cultural stories passed on from generation to generation...maybe I have confused myself (yet again) but I thought there was a difference in fairytales and this form of story I'm unsuccessfully trying to describe...?

Nonetheless, it is a great beginning to a very unique and exciting-sounding story. I hope to you the best in the writing process and that I can have the joy of reading it soon!

This was really good and I would be oh so pleased if you wrote more :)

And it was a very good fairytale, although if the girl could talk to the goose the entire time, why didn't she just tell him to not go close to the fox? I guess thats how things work in fairy tales.

It's not marked complete so him growing up and having a very romantic fantasy adventure sounds really good to me_

It does sound like a fairytale in the beginning. In fact, I though that it was a real fairytale and you were just building on it. It was a shock when he's like "Until she got cancer and died" I like it so far.

Is this also going to be a novel?