|Reviews for Lascivious?|
| fairytale failure chapter 1 . 5/11/2008
Amazing, you have a metaphor or a simile in just about every line here. My favourite was the first three lines, it is easy to imagine 'we left our love in our coat pockets' and it is even better when you describe it further in the next line. I like 'pulse' better than passion because pulse connects it to the heart.
| sweets555 chapter 1 . 3/22/2008
I think I like pulse better than passion.
The visual here is fantastic, and I applaud your use of metaphors. Great job!