|Reviews for eyeglass|
| ilovetheopera chapter 1 . 3/24/2008
Love the assonance going on in the third/fourth lines, even if it was unintentional. Also the sort-of rhyme: progression/recession, sight/might/right. I'm sorry, i don't know my literary devices that well anymore.
More so than anything else I like the hopeless feeling trying to go forward while stuck in the past. I like this (well, duh). Awesome job.
| paradisgatan chapter 1 . 3/24/2008
Oh wow, this is really... striking, I think is the word I'm looking for. It feels /right/. The simple details make it easy to relate to, but more than that, the entire poem has this inescapable rhythm to it, this momentum that carries you along with it, and that touch of irony at the end that makes it cut to the gut. And "slain in thought" is a great line, just for the record. )
Great piece. Kudos.
| lymli chapter 1 . 3/24/2008
wow, I feel something magical in this,