|Reviews for Illusoire|
| allthatmelodrama chapter 10 . 5/4/2009
Okay, I was subconciously expecting that, but when I read that it was still surprising (: Wow, I really want to know what happens next now!
And I'm a bit confused on a few points but I'm sure it'll clear up.
Looking forward to the next chapter!
P.S. That update was REALLY fast. (: Yay!
| Demeterr chapter 10 . 5/4/2009
Ah such a cliffhanger ending to the chapter~~ I can't wait until the next chapter.
| Randomisation chapter 10 . 5/4/2009
woah. great chapter and really quick update :D i like the interaction between kai and teagan, can't wait for the next chapter.
| C. Chen chapter 10 . 5/4/2009
i really like how th plot is developing. This overall is a very interesting and original set up which i really admire. But somehow the writing seems to be falling a little flat. I know this might be a overused statement for writing but "show don't tell". I think i mentioned this in my last review how there was something off. i think i figured it out now. if you take a close look at you're work you use a lot of adjectives to describe feeling. like "he said with sheer malice." but what about him makes it seem like he's angry and wants to hurt her? the way his eye brows are drawn so close together they seem to touch, or the way his fangs seemed to be longer/more noticable than usual? His lips were drawn in a certain way? or his body... This is especially evident when you use two adjectives. [ ] and [ ]. its sometimes emphasises the point that your useing adjectives as a crutch and sometimes the repitition may hurt your work when they overlap or seem redundant to the reader. I love the intencity of the story though. Hope you update soon )
| Mali Steelwing chapter 10 . 5/4/2009
Well, that was not what I expected as an ending, however, I'm beginning to expect the unusual and unexpected from you. I rather like it, and the different spin this story has, with humans being the lower-class citizens and the Others being upper-class. Too many stories I've read have it the other way around, and it makes little sense. This is one of the best fics I've read in a long, long time.
| D-Mish chapter 10 . 5/3/2009
Nice chapter, I actually really enjoyed it. Way to leave us on a cliffhanger!
I wouldn't mind some more action though...
| heavengurl899 chapter 10 . 5/3/2009
ah very evil place to leave us at haha. Ok so some parts of the chapter were slightly confusing (parts where, for example, the teacher was talking about Beauty and the Beast...maybe it was just my slow, sleep deprived brain that didn't get it though). We'll get an explanation for the kiss right? Well duh. I'm so happy you updated and I can't wait for the next update.
| Rachel p.s.rachelgmail.com chapter 10 . 5/3/2009
Hi Kendal, the story is progressing exquisitely and like the other hordes of people who have reviewed, I am eagerly anticipating further plot details...The use of the Beauty and Beast story, particularly the way that you have crafted the Others' version is brilliant. However the human version of the 'Beauty and the Beast' also being translated from an 'original text' was mildly discordant (only because your use of detail is so remarkable)as there are many variants of the story and debates as to which is the 'original' text, unless of course you are referring to the first published version.
Immensely anticipating the next chapter...
| Heather chapter 7 . 5/3/2009
"She ignored the nagging “why” pestering at the back of her brain.
He spoke first. “As far as I’m concerned, the political system doesn’t fail.” He smiled without humor, showing two rows of teeth that looked sharper than they should. “It works just fine for me.” "
Being nit-picky to the extreme, something about this bugged me- I was imagining them walking to the hall in the first bit, and in the next sentence they're sitting down together discussing the project.
Moving plotlines *are* fantastic. :D
| alisaetc chapter 10 . 5/3/2009
omg im dying right now!
i'm new to this site and i just couldn't stop reading this story! i'm completely enamored by it!
ugh... hope you update soon!
| antiKATsta chapter 10 . 5/3/2009
as much as i like the kiss at the end, i'm thinking that there is a motive behind it .
Is the story mentioned alluding to Beauty and the Beast?
Thanks for the update!
| Heather chapter 10 . 5/3/2009
If the storyline is going where I think its going (besides the whole soulmate thing), then I am happy and satisfied.
I am truly enjoying your story- it's one of the better works on fictionpress.
Now, update by the time my exams are done (May 21st), and I will be able to review properly with a real account and everything :)
| Heather chapter 6 . 5/3/2009
Just have to say one more thing!
The detail you have put into the background of this story is exquisite. Not only is this plot different -refreshingly so-, but it is highly detailed and interesting. I can't wait to see where you go with it.
| Heather chapter 5 . 5/3/2009
But... how can Teagan get into the human areas? I know they can't detect human half-breeds, but not being able to detect a hybrid seems to be a little far-fetched.
Still very much enjoying this :D
| Heather chapter 3 . 5/3/2009
Unfortunately, I don't have an FP account. I'll review properly as soon as I get around to making one.
I don't usually leave reviews- but I'm enjoying this story so much I feel compelled to.
I do have one question though: how is it that Teagan is able to sense things that witches are not (like the tension in the classroom with her witch teacher)?
Maybe it is answered on later and I'm getting ahead of myself.
In any case, much enjoyed.