|Reviews for Without|
| Dougie Zerts chapter 1 . 9/2/2017
Have you ever actually ran barefooted?:)
| Vost Thenen chapter 1 . 3/25/2008
You obviously spent time putting thought into the words, which is good. I understand poetry is about simplicity of words, that does not, however, make it exempt from a reader's need for character, event, or purpose. Establish some kind of direction and it'll have some potential.
| vault of glass chapter 1 . 3/25/2008
These two lines are amazing. I keep reading them over and over again trying to see what you are thinking and also to fit my own meaning to them.
| Julius Gillian chapter 1 . 3/25/2008
The imagery I conjured up while reading these two lines is alot more than the words say in this piece, which is actually what a poem should accomplish. In that respect, you did well but I think this 'piece' needs to be more thought out than a simple two liner poem; it's like two cents for a piece of gum.
Write a haiku if you really want to try and be concise.