Reviews for Hyacinth
AK the Twilight chapter 1 . 6/1/2008
You kept the significance of the flower very fluid and essential. As a result, it kept the poem from feeling misled. Your imagery still remains beautiful and the flower theme only makes the poem better. It's not extraordinary compared to your other works, but I can't ignore the beautiful descriptions and truly tangibility of the poem. It's very well done, overall. Great job with this.
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 4/1/2008
No flower supposes to bloom in winter... is supposed to

a love was giving birth to a flower... I'd put a period at the end there

even if noone can love forever... no one

and you told me the tale about Apollo's lover./Maybe it wasn't a true love through the time,but it was a love firm till death. (Id add in those punctuations)

but we don't notice there were wings to fly... semioclon at the end

so we're here waiting for some way to fill the emptiness.. period at the end

if with your blood I could make a flower... If

I like the extended metaphor of the flower... it was really beautiful, especially at the end. I think this is my favorite piece of yours yet. Really great job.
In the Rye chapter 1 . 3/27/2008
the imagery was interesting. i liked the last two lines, also.