Reviews for You Came With The Key
the poison apple chapter 1 . 5/22/2012
This was a really cool story and very well-written! I kinda like james, not to sound like a sadist, but i did.
BeanBagChair11 chapter 1 . 10/24/2010
I love:

the order of these scenes

the plot

the character

the dialogue

the writing

this whole frickin' story.


you are a superb writer. :) I love this so much, it's beautifully dark and beautiful. haha
Novelist chapter 1 . 9/19/2008
Wonderful story- I especially liked the switching between situations. It gives a lot more suspense, as the reader has to wait to find out what happens next in each given time frame. As for your grammar, I was pleasantly surprised. A lot of writers on here hold no stock in proper punctuation and phrasing, and I find it often interferes with the story. I found no such problems with yours, and it certainly made the reading more delightful. Twisted, dark, and utterly to my liking. Good job!
Bonny Abomination chapter 1 . 5/2/2008
that was an amazing fucked up story and I loved it! great job! _
Faith Adeline chapter 1 . 3/29/2008
I liked this, but was confused just a bit. I would edit it a little more and make things a bit clearer. But it was good. Overall, it's about a b piece lol.