|Reviews for Clutched On|
| caramelized02 chapter 1 . 5/14/2013
hi! i just read this fic. and it's amazing! will u ever update this story? because i really love it..
| A Fictional Angel chapter 10 . 2/11/2010
All I knew about the device is that you kicked turtles and stomped on strange deformed creatures.
ROFL! Oh that is hilarious the way you described that.
| A Fictional Angel chapter 4 . 2/11/2010
Hi there! This is xo_angel_xox from LiveJournal. Just a heads up :)
I found you through your profile and decided to check out your writing and my GOD this is fakking hilarious and funny and it made me laugh so hard and I'm only on chapter 4 and I'm totally hooked.
Anyways, love it!
From A Fanfiction Angel
| tearitrightup chapter 14 . 9/8/2009
Your story has so many, SO MANY important plot holes.
For example, why is Riley suddenly so close to the group? Why is she the one making some decisions, like accepting the invitation to the dinner? She's a stranger and doesn't really know the group dynamic yet.
Riley should let the older members of the group do most of the talking, because she herself knows only the veneer of the group's history, TGU's history, and Hargrove's history. She's ignorant of which people are truly allies or enemies. If this was a real story, I'm sure that the group wouldn't even allow her to speak right now. She's only been with them for a few days, a few weeks at the most.
I used to kind of like this story, but now I'm very disappointed. I've been really a childish story after all.
However, don't take this too harshly. I know you are only an aspiring author of fiction, so there's a lot of time to improve. Keep trying!
| tearitrightup chapter 12 . 9/6/2009
] I figured out the code before I continued reading. You made it too obvious. You know why?
It's cause "infjdormjdatjkion" looked too much like information. Also, I was like, since there are so many "jd"'s, then it must be some useless letters.
You should've done pig latin or something instead.
| tearitrightup chapter 6 . 9/3/2009
WOW. I did NOT see that coming.
| tearitrightup chapter 5 . 9/3/2009
I keep thinking that Leon's a good guy. You said that he was a perfect sharpshooter, but if he was that good, how can he miss the vital organs of Dekker?
I think Leon shot Dekker so that the other gang members would leave Dekker alone, thinking that they killed him, but Leon managed to help him escape.
| Butterscotchcandies chapter 7 . 8/27/2009
I had to find a chapter I didnt review on ._.
Is there any chance of an update?... At all? Or at least a notice that you are dropping this story? I know that your really busy, but please just say something about this lol.
| Vicky A chapter 19 . 8/12/2009
| Butterscotchcandies chapter 19 . 5/27/2009
Great chapter! :D I didn't really see any mistakes, but I was reading fast so I must have missed them. Sorry /
Update soon though!
| Kate Marshall chapter 19 . 5/26/2009
Yeah, there were just a couple spots where you might've meant "one" and you put "on". But as far as I could tell, those were really the only mistakes.
/: You tell me a big plot change is coming and then you say that you don't know when you're updating next. *pssh* But good luck writing chapter twenty! :D
Although the one thing I didn't love was when Riley had a break-down. Only because by now, you would think she would be a little more used to it, particularly after watching a whole circus die. And I'm so sad Arnold died. I expected it, but I was kind of hoping when it was all over, that they could go back to Arnold. And be happy or something. :sigh:
Besides that, your scenes were described really, really well. xD Everything was vivid and easy to imagine. And I had a lot of fun reading. Very good chapter!
| JammyMacca chapter 19 . 5/26/2009
I really hoped Arnold wouldn't be dead :(
I like the 3 new characters, seems like they'll add to Clutch's and the gangs backgrounds more
I'm glad that there's going to be more Seph and Dekker soon, and hopefully maybe some more Clutch and Riley interaction? Please?
Looking forward to the next chapter :D
| exil chapter 1 . 5/25/2009
keep it up. damn good story.
| hyacinthgirl18 chapter 19 . 5/25/2009
i like salma and zayne. they're funny, kind of remind me of clutch at times. :) and they have cool names. :) anyways, your story is really entertaining, especially b/c i'm still trying to figure everything out. how TGU got started, how Hargrove came into it, all that kind of stuff. and wait, another new branch next chap? well, good that there will be more seph time. i like him. and dekker? he gets annoying, but in general, i suppose i don't mind him A LOT. :) update whenever you can, you do have a right to have a life. :) laterz loves!~ hyacinth
| sooner or later its over chapter 1 . 5/25/2009