AW that was so cute! sorry... on a high of cuteness... yeah... I love all your one shots! I honestly think that they are amazing... I think maybe you should try to write M, try to mature your writing a bit

I'm sat in the middle of an hospital ward smiling like a complete idiot because of the last line :) Good story, cliched but everybody needs a bit of fluff in their lives right? :)

Fabulous. Absolutely fabulous. I was grinning like a complete loon by the end. I think I adore you.

Oh but of course it's too cheesy/cliched. XD That's why we love it. (:

I love the characters and the interesting way in how they met, and how they interact with each other. Translation: I love this oneshot, and the only reason I'm not glad artistic dreamer added it to our c2 is because I want to add it. XD

no, its extremely cute!

omg, i thought they were realli gonna leave each other, i was about to cry..

Argh! Good job! Extremely realistic, well written and cute! It's sorta cliche but I love how you've portrayed the passing of time and how love grew with them! Anyways, good job - write more!

You know I love cheese. You know I love cliche. What are you talking about, woman? I loved it.

Oh. My. Gosh.

Even though about half way through the story, I figured out the ending... at the end, the hairs on my arms were standing on end. FAR OUT! That was so sweet! I loved it. Hehe.

You have appeased my corny chick flick addicted heart, once again.

The sad thing is... I wish that were me. Haha.

You're a marvelous writer. PLEASE keep it up, hehe. XD

Aww, I liked it. The ending was really really surprising. Don't know if something like that could happen in the real world...but that's what we read these stories for, right:). And I absolutely adored the starting, hide and seek and the fart (lol) and everything. Good job!

I loved that! So adorable and sweet, and not too cliche. At least not in a bad way. :)

very cute.

If you had mentioned that he had tried for Harvard, and maybe she asks if he'd gotten in and he just shrugs and looks down so that we assume he did not get in. otherwise, it doesn't feel set up enough.

I think you need to make sure that each new age, each new section, is vividly set up by clearly setting up the time, setting, and any new characteristics of the characters so we can visualize this. you have some of this going on, but i think you can make it stronger.

overall, a cute piece with much potential to flesh it out and make it a more solid, concrete short story.

aw this was really cute ) but how could she not know where he was going? if their like bff...

Yes, it was cheesy and a tad bit cliched...BUT...I enjoyed it anyways. It was a bit fluffy, but fluffy is good sometimes. The talent is to write a story that is one or more of theses three things but still make it enjoyable, which you pulled off rather well.

~Bri

This one was really cute!