|Reviews for clouds|
| Aquafied chapter 1 . 4/19/2008
i was told we dream in every type of situation
| Yellow Umbrella chapter 1 . 4/17/2008
Wonderful dreamy poem, beautiful imagery but maybe there's another word you could use instead of blue? Just a thought...
| fairytale failure chapter 1 . 4/13/2008
You have a nice dreamy, floaty mood in this poem. I like how you break up the sentences in places I am not expecting, like after the second line; it reinforces the fragmented tone. One suggestion - "Like the rising of the sun at dawn,/or the sinking of it at twilight" sounds a bit awkward. I would change it to 'or its sinking at twilight'.
| no.peace.los.angeles chapter 1 . 4/4/2008
Very pretty little piece. Sometimes it's nice to just reflect on the fantasy of real life. Keep writing! :)
| Random-Idiocity chapter 1 . 4/1/2008
Good job. Everything flows which is important and this just makes a wonderful poem. Keep it Up!