Reviews for Screw Perfection
CaFFy chapter 5 . 4/17/2008
Yay! He's friends with her. NOW RYAN! DO RYAN... (take that however you want) xDD
Nicholas Scott chapter 4 . 4/15/2008
Hm, how to put this without sounding rabid and maniacal. You need to bring in Ryan in a big way. He's the love interest and while his plump lips and emerald eyes sound absolutely alluring and desirable, we the reading public need more. It's been 4 chapters already, quit with the teasing and bring on the hottie! LOL

Now as for the story in general. I love your dialogue. it's really good. Genuine andthe character interaction is really amazing. Especially between Andy and Nathan. You've really showed the tenacious bond of their friendship wonderfully. And Hollie becoming friends with Andy was really nice too. I think you need to add a little humanity to the melody character, she's sounding really far out there. Not that it's unrealistic, but everything we've gheard about her so far is second hand, we need to see her in action to validate and cement who she is (so that we know she's deserving of the bitch label) I won't point out the typos, because in 4 chapters there are very few but I notice one or two as I was reading.

All in all, I really liked it. And will be waiting patiently for more. :)

MidnightDarling chapter 4 . 4/13/2008
thanks for the updates and im so sorry i havent been able to reveiw , ive been so busy ,and secret:not even allowed to be on the computer*grin*,however these chapters were good and i also like your lottie character too she so funny ,oh and andy was being naughty,lol i love how you made him kinda obssesed,also to be honest ,i thought(hoped)the client would be ryans parentslol but its probably better it was his freind ,like you mentioned, love the chase!overall it was good ,some really minor spelling mistakes but it was another amusing ,wonderfully,leaving you content chapter,oh and sorry if i didnt ask any questions-trying to be sneaky!lol please update!
Thread of Life chapter 4 . 4/12/2008
O this is starting to get pretty interesting! I'm curious to see how he uses Naomi to get to Ryan... And ew gross teacher, although now I am curious to what THAT was about. Haha. Nice job as usual.
CaFFy chapter 4 . 4/12/2008
Hehe doorway to Ryan GO GO. RUN FOR THE DOOR. DD
JtheChosen1 chapter 4 . 4/12/2008
excellent chapter! i can't wait until Ryan and Andy meet each other! ah and ur characters are so funny!

only concern is that there r a few, and by a few i mean like 3 or 4, grammer blips. but nothing serious, i'm just an english nazi!

story kicks butt, luv it tons!
JtheChosen1 chapter 3 . 4/11/2008
wow...this is really good! i'm definitely keeping my eye on this one!
CaFFy chapter 3 . 4/8/2008
o.o; Lets see him get Ryan now. :D
Not Quite Right in the Head chapter 3 . 4/8/2008
This is really good. You should bring in more of Ryan.
Thread of Life chapter 3 . 4/8/2008
For some reason I thought I had already reviewed this but I guess not..

I really like this story so far! So keep up the good work!
crazy-yaoi chapter 2 . 4/5/2008
thanks with the update and i was aminging for the first review:)

anyway this was a good chapter and i liked the way you portrayed how sometimes sterotypes are screwed up,thats how it is at my school, everyone is freinds with at least one person from a different sterotype ,weird _my jock and cheerleader friends arnt mean at all like your characters lol .but, then again evryone does say im naive...and slow .oh well at least i survive:D

ooh before i forget(i swear i suffer from memory loss) i really want to know if theres going to be ryan n andy action soon *grin*hopfuly? maybe?for me? *smiling inocently* wait this is going to be that pairing ,right? i have made that mistake before .well please update soon!(wow,longest review ive ever written:D
CaFFy chapter 2 . 4/4/2008
Hah his parents gunna beat him 'bout the sports. Update soon.
CaFFy chapter 1 . 4/4/2008
Heehehehe interesting
firestar267 chapter 1 . 4/4/2008
Ah, i really liked this! I think it set the scene well and has real potential! Keep it up :)
MidnightDarling chapter 1 . 4/2/2008
this is good and funny ,altough i cant relate with Andy about the whole popularity,sports,and school overall thing , im sure my friend can,he complains about it all the i like it and im curious so, please update.
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