Minor error: "No harm done," Fiona said, hoping Gwen had learned her lesson. I guess we'll see. "I met some people. Actually, I met the SON of one of my parent's friends."
Jake is actually Noah's brother not son.
Great first chapters :) but I guess you won't finished this fictionpress :( it's been 5 years. But think about it, this story has lot of potential.
KEEP WRITING!

mary sue alert

Hi I just wanted to say that I loved all the other Big Apple stories but they don't seem to be up any more what happened to them?

Hi, great story! Please continue with it!

Also, read some other reviews and your story actually says that Fiona is studying paleontology not archeology! (I tihnk Jake is the one studying that, right?)

So anyways, PLEASE continue with your stories. I miss them :(

Hey, I am reading your story and as an archaeologist I am afraid to tell you that your heroine has made a big mistake studying archaeology if she is interested in dinosaurs. Archaeologists are interested in human societies and won't be looking for dinosaurs. I know, it is a detail and easily fixed, but still...try to find the right study otherwise everyone who knows a little bit about archaeology will be annoyed by it. :)

hey just a heads up... archaeology is a sub field of anthropology which in its simplest form is the study of human beings. Archaeology is the study of artifacts that humans have left behind. We pretty much just study the trash thats been left in a way. Some archaeologist do focus on animal bones found at sites (however they relate it back to practices of bone tool manufactoring or different types of animals used as food etc.) and some even go as far as studying human remains but they are called osteoarchaeologists. Paleontologists study dinosaur bones. Archaeology and paleontolgy are two vastly different fields. If you character wants to study dinosaurs she would not be studying archaeology. However if she was interested in early human ancesters such as neanderthals that would be classified as physical or evolutionary anthropology.

AW...update?

xx

I think I've read all the other Big Apple stories at completely different times and without knowing that they were related to each other, but getting vague little voices at the back of my head saying this sounds familiar. Well, anyway, this is the first one I'm reading that I understand the stories around it as well, and I think it's pretty cute so far. I like Fiona - watching her grow up (somewhat) through the other stories makes it easier to empathize with her as a character. Can't wait for the next few chapters!

Are you ever going to update this? I really want to read more )

oh...please please continue!

i absolutely

Wow! I;ve read all of your Big Apple stories, and let me just say that they are amazing. Once I started to read one I had to keep going. You've done really well. There great stories. Please Update Fiona's story soon.

~Obsession

I just love your stories, can't wait to read more! Update soon!

NO! It can't end here! I read all of Cassidy's story last night, and then all of Claire's and Emilia's today, and now this. Noo! It can't just stop heere!

I really like your writing style. It's fun and engaging, and the characters jump from the page into your head. They're like my own little friends, and I can just imagine myself with them, and them hanging around here. They're /real/, and not a lot of authors are successful at that. So, thank you.

But I'd prefer an updated chapter. Or, the rest of the story. It's addictive!

I LOVE your stories - I swear to god, I read four of them in one sitting (all the NY series), and it was an extremely welcome break from all the college work I'm trying to finish. Thank you so much for writing, and I hope you update this one soon, cos I really do love dinosaurs, and now I love them even more. :)

really cute plot so far!

Fiona is all grown up and i cant wait to read the rest of her story!

post asap!