Absolutely...incredible. I don't have anything to criticise. And the last few lines just...blew me away.

H-holy heffing hell...you write so well, so intensely that I'm caught somewhere between jealousy and admiration...

there was something beautifully lyrical about this, and I got so caught up in it all that I totally forgot to put my nit-pick hat on...

It really did read like a dream...great job!