Reviews for Adventures At Northview Boarding School |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Lol. So much for promises eh? |
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![]() ![]() ![]() That was so cruel of him to do that lol |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thanks for the update. Can't wait to see what marcus does; i'm sure it will be hilarious. |
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![]() ![]() More more more more lol it wasn't the best chapter but it was still good. Can't wait for more! Art |
![]() ![]() ![]() i don't think it sucked. i am however getting a little confused. whats going on with marcus's parents - why don't the brothers want anyone to know that they are dead? even if it was found out why would that information becoming public make them leave the school? will anything happen to valerie? |
![]() ![]() Um, okay, you haven't mentioned it since about chapter 2 or 3, whenever, but... are they worried about Mel being pregnant at all? Did that story line fizzle out or what? |
![]() ![]() Chapter 30 is great! The flow is nice and smooth easy to follow, I hate the fact that it is resting on a cliff hanger though! lol Can't wait to read Chapter 31! |
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![]() ![]() ![]() This story is really cute and I really like it so far. Although, there are too many names to keep track of.I also think you started out with a plan for the story to go one way (with all the siblings stories) but ended up forgetting about that plan. I really think you should maybe edit the story and get rid of some characters who are really just names that make things confusing and interrupt the flow. When you do get a chance to edit you might want a new intro to the first chapter because your writing is infinitely better since then and I think you can come up with something more creative. Also consider either adding more different POV chapters(Marcus's siblings and others) or getting rid of the ones you have because it's so confusing. Anyways this chapter was funny and I'm sorry if I offended you in anyway, I really want this story to be even greater than it already is. Honestly, this story is great it just needs some tightening up. Sorry once again if I offended you. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I Love this chapter, I'm very glad that you helped CJ ask Mel out, it was an excellent move. I hate that Marcus guy though, and that Jesse kid, he is so annoying. lol Thank you for updating. Can't wait to hear more! |
![]() ![]() ![]() OMG I LOVE YOU! I totally hated Jesse! I'm so glad that he is finally gone! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm thinking CJ and Melissa being 2gether. I'm excited 2 see what's going 2 happen next, so Update soon...Please. ;) |
![]() ![]() ![]() i'm excited to see what happens next, but i have a feeling it's going to take a supernatural turn...which i hope it doesn't. cause i'm pretty sick of werewolves/vampires (and any other supernatural creature for that matter), but it's your choice and your story. but as a reader of this story, i'm just throwing my opinion out there and saying that the whole supernatural thing is a little overplayed. but that's just my guess, you might not even be going in that direction hahaha. another thing, i feel like there are a lot of unresolved plot lines and such, but maybe you're putting them on the back burner right now and will bring them back later? i really like this story, but i feel like it jumps around a lot. just some of my opinions and thought to give you feedback ) and i really do enjoy your story! hope you update sooner...i feel like people just don't write on this site anymore because i rarely ever get story updates. but then again i haven't found any new stories recently. |