|Reviews for The Ugly Old Shoe Box|
| starlit x sky chapter 1 . 5/24/2008
This was really good.
It was sad, but powerful.
I liked it.
| misery sister chapter 1 . 4/25/2008
[It’s and ugly old shoe box. That seemed fitting.]
- and should be an
[Please, I was just being stupid. I’m sorry and I never mea]
- You seem to be missing a couple of words here.
This was powerful. I enjoyed it very much, sure, the small mistakes withered down its emotion a bit, but those can be easily fixed. I suggest a line break maybe, when you switch from the girl to the guy. It can make things clearer - but if you don't do that, maybe you could add more transition.
| Arydesia chapter 1 . 4/8/2008
interesting idea! I think it could be extended into an excellent chaptered story, but it works well as a one-shot!
| Zonne chapter 1 . 4/8/2008
That's weird and sad and very interesting idea. It makes me wish it was more than a one-shot.
| Lady Aether chapter 1 . 4/8/2008
Were we feeling deep today? I like these two.
| bergamot-orange chapter 1 . 4/8/2008
Very nice! This story was rather bittersweet...but at the same time, it had humor. The line "It looks like it was attacked by the tape monster" was the one that got me. Brilliant!
The male character was especially real. I could just imagine him there with his tape...
All in all, it was a good story. Well written, few grammatical mistakes...Great!