Reviews for Grounded
fairytale failure chapter 1 . 4/29/2008
I really like your description, especially in the second stanza - I could really see 'grated puffs of ice' in my head. You captured the mood well in this poem, especially in the third stanza, the whole concept of being young and having fun. One thing I would suggest is to put the 'ing' of skating with the line above it, I don't know why you seperated the word.
Faerie Tales chapter 1 . 4/12/2008
I'm so glad you've started up on fictionpress again. It's lovely to read these refreshing bursts, helps add weight to moments in life.
Time To Change chapter 1 . 4/8/2008
I love iceskating... haven't been in a while. Hate it when I lose the energy to even make the effort to do things I enjoy.

On the poem, I really enjoyed it. However, I'm not sure about the way you split "skate/ing" into too. It just looks odd. Otherwise I love the first verse. You really captured how it feels.

I particularly enjoyed the detail in this; the simple vividness of the imagery, the reality of it. It felt honest.

Good work,