Reviews for Water Lily
crappypasta chapter 1 . 1/19/2013
I really liked this. the way you made their characteristics come alive. a wonderful short read!
chhh chapter 1 . 10/16/2012
loove et
chhh chapter 1 . 10/16/2012
good 2 long
Jesse the Storyteller chapter 1 . 4/19/2008
This is a cute little poem. At first I was slightly annoyed by the overuse of the words "blue" and "raindrops" but then I noticed that it adds something to the poem. This line is problematic: "As his saw the fairytale light" Do you mean he?

I wish there was more clarity as to what is actually going on in this poem... it seems like a sweet fairytale and I wish I could know more about it. :)


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MidnightStar005 chapter 1 . 4/13/2008
When I have more time I will read more of your work.

I just love reading your poems.

Oh, I am going to add this to my favs.

Best Wishes!
Tranquil Thorns chapter 1 . 4/8/2008
My only problem here is that you seemed to switch tenses almost without warning. It goes from 'he steps' from 'he stepped', something that managed to throw me off a little.

I like the ending, too, though it seems a little improbable even by 'fairytale' standards. I almost wanted some kind of conflict; I wanted a trace of the human-boy's amazement, some type of reaction to finding a fairy.

Keep writing!