Reviews for HBE Old Version |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Will this story get finished? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Loved it. Need it. Want more of it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Y'know I just did the dumbest thing and typed my entire review in the email part of logging in cause I'm reviewing via phone and got side tracked. Lovely opening for my very first review on this story, huh? lol. Well as I originally wrote, its quite obvious that Jay and Damian are going to have a relationship of some sort lol. I'm totally in love with this story thus far and can't wait to see what happens next! Please update soon! :D |
![]() ![]() Oh god, I don't know what the chances are of you updating, but they don't seem very big. :( The latest chapter is just way too sad for me to accept, lol. I adore your characters- they're all likable and the way they act in situations is quite believable. I also like the two main characters and how neither both of them or their relationship are cliched compared with other highschool romances. (ie. popular jock with unpopular kid, something I see with practically every other story of this type). The pacing is also quite good- I didn't feel like you were rushing or going too slowly either. However, I think a few other reviewers mentioned this, but the interlude seems strangely out of place. I think revealing a new relationship would be more effective starting from the latest chapter, not laced throughout the story. I did like the little hints towards this though, or at least towards a kind of separation. This really makes me wonder if Damien and Gavin are going to have a happy ending. Lines like "If things don't work out, huh? I'm hoping it does. After all this time... I hope with every fiber of my being, it does" make me think that they will, but then lines like these "I only wish I'd known it then" make me think twice. I kind of hate Damien for apparently cheating on Gavin and really hope it's not what it seems, but eh, it's only realistic I guess. Anyways, love it, and hope you update soon! |
![]() ![]() Hey, I'm reviewing on you're 3 year aniversary of this story. It's really good, and you gave us a tidbit of what happens at college and I WANT MORE thxies, -Shadowfax- |
![]() ![]() ![]() continue...? UGH please dont let this story rot i LOVE it? |
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![]() ![]() ![]() ;_; *tears tears tears* Please continue this. The last chapter so far is so sad! |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Aw your story is uber-amazing! Damien is so cute! Please update and continue with your greatness! |
![]() ![]() ![]() So... I've just recently spent all my time reading your story when I should have been reading Aristotle's Ethics instead... Let's just say your story is WAY more interesting! Anyways! Sorry for finishing what you had written before I reviewed but that's just how I roll... Now on to your review! Your story is SUPER adorable! Like really! I love the fact that it's progressing at an appropriate speed, that there's some drama but not too much, and that the relationship between Gavin and Damien is actually believable. Must say, the best part of the whole story iwas when Nate's dare came along. I swear I literally laughed out loud... And I was reading it in a public place so you can bet the looks I was getting were a little strange! Some things I have questions about: what exactly happened to Gavin's mother... Will we ever find out? Are Damien and Gavin going to work out? (judging by the interlude you threw in there they aren't.) what ever happened between Nate and Will? Ahh! Too many questions for you probably... But either way you have a very well written story with an intriguing plot. Kudos! :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oah! Love this story! :D Poor Damien all alone in a new place :P I read it as fast as I could. Always before and after work till the night :D Sorry, this is a bit random comment, I know :o |
![]() ![]() ![]() NO! Gavin is too freaking awesome to be left behind And i refuse to accept Jay XP Gah! *glares at auther with intesity* upddatte... This story is freaking epic. xx Echo-chan |
![]() ![]() ![]() YAY! an update! even tho it was kinda sad :( poor Gavin. poor Damien for that matter. and okay, wtf? i don't like this "Jay" kid. keep away from Gavin's man! lol, can't wait for another update. i really do love this story. p.s. i find it hilarious that u introduced two new characters called "Ethan" and "Jay" because those are my brother's first and middle names respectfully. xD |
![]() ![]() ![]() Yeah, well, Jay may be swift but he's not Gavin. I didn't keep my high school sweetie, but he was a drag: Gavin's not. |