Reviews for i am simple
half-sketched.staccatos chapter 1 . 4/12/2008
konban wa

I thought this poem was OK... until I got to the end, which is when I loved it. Those last few lines were beautiful:

today, I want to learn everything

like a six-year-old again

before I slip

and do a double take and become

complicated again.

Those lines - loved them. Especially the first two. Those were my favorite. Learning like a six-year-old again. That's just... so innocent. Can I add those lines to my quote book?

Ha det

-Shan-
a silenced revolution chapter 1 . 4/12/2008
...it would be so nice to go back and learn everything like a six-year-old again. nice.
East-0f-Eden chapter 1 . 4/12/2008
:) nothing better than saturadays
ilovetheopera chapter 1 . 4/12/2008
you'll prove more true than those that have more cunning to be strange.

(paraphrased shakespeare)

the last verse is a surprise, in a good way. it's a good ending to a satisfying poem; i especially liked the fourth verse (if you count the first line as a verse).

though "the ink of nature filling me out" is kinda awkward, to me.