|Reviews for i am simple|
| half-sketched.staccatos chapter 1 . 4/12/2008
I thought this poem was OK... until I got to the end, which is when I loved it. Those last few lines were beautiful:
today, I want to learn everything
like a six-year-old again
before I slip
and do a double take and become
Those lines - loved them. Especially the first two. Those were my favorite. Learning like a six-year-old again. That's just... so innocent. Can I add those lines to my quote book?
| a silenced revolution chapter 1 . 4/12/2008
...it would be so nice to go back and learn everything like a six-year-old again. nice.
| East-0f-Eden chapter 1 . 4/12/2008
:) nothing better than saturadays
| ilovetheopera chapter 1 . 4/12/2008
you'll prove more true than those that have more cunning to be strange.
the last verse is a surprise, in a good way. it's a good ending to a satisfying poem; i especially liked the fourth verse (if you count the first line as a verse).
though "the ink of nature filling me out" is kinda awkward, to me.