|Reviews for I Could|
| Peevxwm Vaj chapter 1 . 4/15/2008
Fantastic! Writing the piece in couplets accentuates the juxtaposition of the fluff against the dark - a good effect. There are a few points where the meter is a little awkward and the poetic/flick rhyme is a little stretch, but even these deviations are appropriate, even if unintentional, given the "angst" content of the piece.
btw, if the piece is autobiographical, make sure you get some help. I like happy endings.
| Unknown Sorrow chapter 1 . 4/15/2008
Overall, I like the poem. Great idea, and the words have meaning; but it doesn't seem to flow very well. It's like the rhyme scheme is taking the meaning from the words. Nice poem, but it's nearing the point where it almost seems forced.