Haha, pretty funny - has a hint of real life to it. :P Haha, are you filipino? I dunno, cuz I know Happyslip shows Filipino famiy related stuff (I think), and my friend loves her too :P and yeah, she's filipino so she can relate. :D

lol love it.

lol yeah that is kinda silly :)

Sorry, I forgot to say before.

The first chapter shows a good level of description and mixture of sentence lengths and structures.

Neither of these made me laugh.

I found the main character (Kevin/Henry- for goodness' sake, it doesn't take much to keep the main character's name consistant) of the first chapter utterly objectionable and unsympathetic. I also don't really understand why you found the need to tell me about someone taking out some rubbish. It's not exciting or interesting, and it certainly wasn't funny.

I found the poem in the second chapter simply inane. It didn't say anything.

There just didn't seem to be any point to any of this. I didn't feel that you had tried to achieve anything with either piece of work.

If you would like to take issue with what I've said, feel free to e-mail me.

Err...

Cute. .