|Reviews for Shadow Remnants|
| Xein of Nethling chapter 1 . 7/28/2009
okay, ill come back and review in more detail later when im not busy but 2 quick things-
firstly, if you're able to do this easily without disrupting the story flow, try and put in more white space, break paragraphs more often. it starts to mess peoples brains up when u read huge long paragraphs.
secondly, i sort of agree with your 1st reviewer that you jump into the story pretty fast. like, i read the first paragraph and i was like whoa im confused because it starts just like bang!
other than that, you have really descriptive style and a wide vocab. that's probably what i have the most trouble with ;)
good start, and happy writings!
~Xein of Nethling
| RYTwinDemon chapter 1 . 10/18/2008
Wonderful descriptions, I think the plot's moving along pretty well. Keep up the good work! :)
| Ignus chapter 1 . 6/11/2008
I have to say the story is quite impressive. The only thing I take issue with (and I've done this as well sadly) is that you jumped into the story. Your description techniques are something that I can only dream of accomplishing. I hope you keep it up.