|Reviews for Last Gift|
| C Shot chapter 1 . 10/1/2008
Extremely well written, as a Marine in Iraq I was looking for something to hit on. I really couldn't find anything to far off, except one thing. The names of places don't sound Arabic, 'Cheekha Dar', now if you put it as 'al-Cheekha' I would have said "I've never been to Baghdad, so who knows?"
I love the quote at the end of it, like I said though. Well written, and I just had to be picky.
| Zonne chapter 1 . 4/19/2008
Very touching and powerful. I like the way the smile pushed its way to his face. That seemed so genuine and odd at the same time.
I think some of his description at the beginning could be changed, particularly the word blob. He seems to have so much depth, that blob doesn’t suit him.
Keep writing and thanks for writing this.
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