|Reviews for Cotton Candy|
| NovemberLily chapter 1 . 6/2/2008
the imagery in this poem is so amazing! it has a really nostalgic, frozen time frame feeling to it and I especially like the verse that begins with "The ocean's waters are bright blue, and mesh with the sea of yours..."
my only two suggestions have nothing to do with the actual poem, more the format of it. first, i think this poem would be easier to enjoy if the individual verses were single spaced. also, i have a little gramaatical correction. in the third verse, i'm not sure if the grammar is correct. is it supposed to be the men in the clouds swirl our skies or the man in the clouds swirls our skies because right now your noun and verb don't agree.
but all that irrelevant stuff aside, it's a really wonderful poem with absolutely gorgeous descriptions.
| miscellanea chapter 1 . 4/16/2008
I would use all of these words but make it into a paragraph.