Reviews for Unexpected Places |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Your doing an amazing job on the re-write. And yes, I do notice the quotes, and I always read them. They kind of give me a little insight into what I am going to be reading, which I thank you for. I'm hoping the Awards Ceremony chapter is like the one from before, because it was amazing. Anyways, thank you for updating, and I will be eagerly anticipating a new chapter. :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Excellent chapter! You like keeping your readers guessing, don't you? I've worked my way through this these last couple of days, and it's starting to come together, without giving everything away. Good job! I wonder what's going on with Nick's past... and of course, I'm curious about Jaymie. Update soon, I can't wait to see what happens next! -rach |
![]() ![]() So...wow. Just wow. Obviously I haven't read the updated version in a while because I got to "Operation: Defunct Bugs" and was all "whoa what's going on here?" then went back a chapter and had no idea who Seth was, then went back to chapter 6 and finally got everything sorted out. So, all in all, a pretty successful read. But um. The "experiment"...I honestly don't know what to say. That's pretty intense. I'm not sure whether I like this version or your old version better, but yeah...intense. But then, what else should I be expecting? Haha :D I'm getting tired so I think I'll get to bed, but that was such a revealing, exciting, generally awe-inspiring and yeah. xx |
![]() ![]() You were right, the quotes were cool and they added something. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Finally! I've been waiting for so long to read more! :D The last part was cute, when he did the rose thing for Jaymie. Just adorable |
![]() ![]() ![]() Spy school. Interesting. Does the school have a cover of what it is? Because if any non-spy (i.e. civilian) walked in, how would they explain it? Great job on this chapter. :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ooh. A spy story. I like it. :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() OOH, I can't wait for the next chapter! this story is so intense and I'm really sad for Jaymie...what the heck did Seth do and is he a bipolar psychopath? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wo so intense! hope you update soon, spy stories are always the best :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hey, I think I started reading this before the rewrite, but I never left reviews, sorry for that. So far the rewrite seems pretty good. I found one small error in this chapter though. Jaymie says she didn't know Nick's last name was Wynters, until her friends mention it, but in the previous chapter Kenton used Nick's last name when he was directly talking to/about Nick. Just a little detail, but I wanted to point it out. You keep alluding to this big secret Jaymie has, you better tell us what it is soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Absolutely amazing! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Woah! This version is coming along great. I just finished Chapter six and seven. Great job, and keep it coming. I totally understand about exams (I have them too :( ) |
![]() ![]() i am so incredibly pleased by this update! you are improving with every chapter you write, which is why i cannot wait for the next one. keep up the good work! |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is immensely different from the original. I mean WOAH! Amazing writing, and I love where this is going so far. Jaymie seems to have more depth in this version. I am so glad your revising this, because, don't get me wrong I loved the original, this version is probably one of the best stories I'm currently reading. You should publish this. Dreaded exams... mine are coming too. Good luck ;) Till then I guess :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() haha this is a good story! but im really confused about the flashbacks...i dont get when the flashbacks take place. like is it a few years ago, a few months ago? what? lol |