I stayed up all night trying to finish reading this story, but unfortunately sleep overwhelmed me. This was a great read! Unlike some other fiction I've read, there were no spelling mistakes (none that I caught though). I really loved Mango's ramblings; it reminds me of myself, going from one thought to another completely randomly. And Tuesday (wow, what a name) was just a great, like-able person, even though he tricked Mango throughout the whole story. I guess it would make sense that the teachers would get involved with the penpal name exchanges-should have seen that coming. The only closure that I didn't get was the reason for why Adrian and Mango had such a strong "grudge" against Mango's father. Was arguing all they did, because judging by the way both of the boys reacted when the father was mentioned in the piercing salon, there must have been something more extreme than verbal conflicts. At the end of the story, that really didn't matter though, and when you added in that pothole, that Tuesday was dying, my heart just sank deep into the depths of despair! Fortunately, it was just a pothole! Phew! Congratulations on this great story! Will be heading over to your profile to see what other great pieces of art you've got stored up!

that was a really awesome fik. i loved mango. he was amazing!

Wonderful and slightly obscure story. I liked Mango's eccentric manner and his mum. his mum was way cool. yes i am calling her his mum because at least someone should ;p

Tuesday, i feel i should insert a sigh here... wasn't he just so f*ckable? *giggles hysterically*

few small mistakes but i can't talk, i can't even spell. plus when the story is this interesting to tend to ignore them is so going on my favorite list

on your author's note- yes a pat on the back for you. i totally agree on you about leaving a finished story finished. sequels sux. i mean seriously, once they've got their lover, solved and side problems whats the point dragging it on? we don't want to hear about them in the sequel fighting and making up or worse having a damn baby. can you tell its one of those things that bugs me? haha.

brilliant story. loved it.

what the hell?

where did that come from? i hope that was a cruel joke, that last line. otherwise i am going to sulk, for like a week. ok, deep breath, next chapter...

- My intelligence amazes even me. -

Yes it amazes me too... or lack there of... ;p

So funny.

slaps mango up the back of the head. what the hell? come on! he's just so f*ckable. hasn't told us a thousand times already? why oh why would you go and say that?

i am pulling my hair out for him. idiot.

:) needless to say i am highly amused.

now that was a shock to the system.

awe. these two are hilarous together. though his thoughts about his cousin do creep me out. Mango is really something else ;)

man tuesday knows how to tease poor little mango

I read this and blinked.- (Another thing: three quarters of what I say is sarcastic. There isn't a reason for it. Don't bother analysing it.) - he is like the male version on me.

seeing as im writing an essay and reading this story at the same time, it would make sense that i missed when mango dyed his hair pink...when did that happen? so confused. great story, love the random hyperness.

I would just like to say that I am Canadian and I have never heard the term 'Candy Floss' in my whole life - it is called cotton candy. Candy floss kinda sounds british though...

However I do drink pop, and I'm damned proud of it. :P

The word soda sounds so weird... :D

Right, so I just read that in one shot. My head hurts now. I'm pretty sure my brain has exploded, and Mango is taking over, which is gross because I'm allergic to Mangoes, but now I'm thinking/typing like him and that's just wrong..

Shutting up now, before I make my head hurt any more than it already does. Cute and entertaining story, nice balance, since I read PS. I Hate You immediately before.

best story i've read ever! you should have it published. I might just say that you had me cowering and 'oh noing' all through the book but I have to admit you write a very convincing spastic like even if you denied being one I still wouldn't believe you so great job! :)

I could only read up until the middle of chapter 2 which is sad.

I think this story has a great plot and everything but the fact that you keep changing some permanant facts confused me.

Like how Monica's job doesn't pay much but keeps them stable and they're not rich, yet later you mention that they live on the beach because they're rich.

And Monica is a yoga teacher and hasn't worked much from before and after Mango's father's death yet she's a workaholic AND works in an office?

And you put brackets in most of your paragraphs when they aren't needed.

I would've thought this story is great but I can't read past chapter 2, it's just too confusing, sorry.

Although I like your writing style and how Mango is weird (a little too weird for a 17 yr old) and how he's also a bit girly. I like them girly men :)