|Reviews for Alone|
| dragonflydreamer chapter 1 . 4/19/2008
Reviewing for the Review Game's Review Marathon! (link in profile)
This is very powerful. I'm assuming this boy is quite young, and I think that's what I like so much about this. In a section towards the end, there were a few lines that alternated between shorter and longer. It sounded really good. Another reviewer mentioned the "yes sir-ee." I have mixed feelings about it. It does sort of break the mood, but it's also what made me assume that the boy is young and, if I'm right, then I guess it makes sense. Keep up the good work!
| ruby ruby ruby chapter 1 . 4/19/2008
well works really well, like it han't sunk in yet. where you caught up in 9/11 or even 7/7?
| unuttered.thoughts chapter 1 . 4/18/2008
one thing that really stuck out to me as not amazingly good would be the very last part "yes sir-ee" it does not flow well and ruins it a bit. but the rest is rather good.
| kiwisnake chapter 1 . 4/18/2008
T-T how sad! that was such a terrible day. great poem. :(i'm gonna start crying if i keep reaing it...