So, I first encountered this story a long time ago (before getting this account), and I came back to reread it and review. It's just as good as I remember. There are some grammar issues, but those are just structural - they don't change the fact that the writing is amazing. The characters are wonderfully complex, and the story line is just . . . wow.
It seems like you haven't updated your stories or profile in a while, but I still wanted to leave a review here. And even though I probably won't get a reply, I wanted to ask that you keep writing. :) This talent is too good to be wasted.

Wow. Really enjoyed it, and looking forwards to finding out what happens next (-so long as Kiir forgives Nightmare for leaving again. At some point.)

This will be a running comentary as i read the chapter. Zaer is an ASS!Zaer is an is a scared, chicken s*t, p*y. Maybe he isn't as stupid as i thought *evil snicker*. But he's still an evil ass. i lied, he's still a moron. I think Zaer might actually care about Kiir a little bit. Huh, who knew? Kane is really (underline really) creepy (good job). I really don't like Kane. He's making me actually like Zaer a little bit more *shiver in disgust*.I actually feel bad for Zaer. Well done. I really liked this chapter, especially the end. It gave a kind of "humanity" to Zaer that has been missing for a long time, and you introduced the mad hatter so well. Loved it. And this is a much longer review than the one for 29, so HA. AND im all cought up, so double HA.

love you,

POTU

That was less cliffy actually then most of your chapters, but it was a little cliffy. great Chapter by the way. I love the emotions and fear that the style made me feel. i felt like i was *in* nightmare's head. Yay you! There were a few typos and sentences that didn't quite make fluid sence. but other than that it was a pretty phenomenal chapter.

By the way, i read this during one of my classes, so don't ever say i didn't put you before my studies.

love you,

POTU

I would imagine Kirr being much more bitter over the fact that he threw a celebration for Nyxi and completely forgot about her.

Hey sweetie,

I finally got to it. sorry it took so long. it was really good, and really sort of sad. by the way, nice little cliff hanger there. very subtle (sorry for anyone who reads this review and doesn't know what i mean, just ignore me). anyhoo, you have some typos but other than that very nice chapter. as to the "summary" of pretty little monster, not bad. i don't really love the last bit, "And it gets you." i think it should be something else, like "and it swallows you whole" but that's just me, and its not bad. other than that i don't have anything else to share.

Love you babe,

can't wait for the next one(actually i sort of can because i know whats coming, but whatever). keep up the good work.

Love POTU

YAY!

I love this! I was so happy when Kiir was finally able to fly again! She's been sad for so long, it's nice to see her truly happy for a change. Nightmare must be happy too. Thank you so much for letting me read this story! When I think of drawing it, though, I get so overwhelmed because it seems like it would take me years to draw all the details, expressions and scenery. Actually, it probably WOULD take me years. This is why I need a full-time job doing this. Very much so! And assisticants!

Anyway, I'll try to straighten out the relationships in my head for next time. Keep up the good work! Now I'm all inspired to draw more of the manga! See you! .

Okay,so you already know that I read 24(loved the dance). So I'm moving right on to 25. The actual battle, as in the fighting, was actually better than I thought it was going to be, but your genius shows through with the dialog. Nightmare is spectacular, and you really get a sense of his personality. You get to see what he is like when he's not being all sweet with Kiir. I already read 26(still squeal-worthy), and so am just going to give you insight on 27. (random comment that is not integral to the plot or your writing: I love that they have indoor plumbing.) Love the "unless you'de like to join me" comment. I held my breath too. Did you know that you do that "he rested his forehead on hers" thing a lot(as in like all of your characters do it)? I loved 27, and again I say; FORESHADOWING! But other than that it was really good, and even with that it was still really good. I love that you tried to add a bit of heat in there(you pretty much succeeded too). Great additions to the story.

P.S. Now that I've read them, you cant hold my birthday present hostage.

Love you,

POTU

wait wait wait! no no no! i want more! now! or soonish! pleasie pleasie pleease?

i really find your writing style intersting with the time skips and all. it was a bit confuseing with the stages in the begining of the story cause i didnt know what they were, but now i do and so its smooth sailing. keep it up :)

Finally Nightmare came back! I've been waiting for this a long time. Please post the next one soon! I'm running out of sad music to play while I read it.

By the way, I've begun drawing more of the manga. However, with the speed at which I draw, it will take ages to catch up to the writing. (T.T) With all the manga I draw, I need a full time job plus assistants to finish on time! Maybe Katie can find time out of all her precious roleplaying to help.

wow

i will definatly keep an eye out for this one !

GREAT JOB

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read mine ?

Okay! I'll just wait then, if you're you're going to mention it anyway. For some reason, Adele is a really interesting person to me.

Sorry by the way, but I forgot that the Isaac you've told me about before and the Isaac on the Council were the same person. I forgot his name. And I'm also very sorry about comparing your writing style to Stephanie Meyer's! I just meant that you were descriptive. It was supposed to be a compliment...(.

Hey, I finally read it. It only took me like a month to read it. Anyhoo. I really like this chapter. Can't wait for the next one.\

Love,

POTU

O.O Ran is back! And solid! Thank heavens that Kiir has some company now before she goes insane!

You should try listening to some music when you look at these chapters. "Oedipus,"(Regina Spektor) and "Love Never Loved Me," go especially well with this chapter and the ones right before it.

Yaay! I like chapter twenty. I'm glad that the Dancers are all right. Nightmare and Kiir make such a great couple.

Regarding Kiir and Zaer, I was thinking it what it would be like and how the tables would turn if Adele came back. What do you think would happen? Would Kiir blame her for everything and making Zaer hate her? Would Zaer kill her again?