Reviews for The Crash
flawlessangel08 chapter 1 . 4/20/2008
This is good but the first two stanzas dont really flow well with the others,it jumps from one scene to the next.I think you could explain the accident a bit more to improve last 7 stanzas are great, I like the rhyming scheme.
person is gone chapter 1 . 4/19/2008
As a poem, it's ok. Personally, I would've left the rhymes, just 'cause they seem to drag a bit on the meaning and seriousness of it. Like this line, "Now you can’t walk, only hop" - seems almost comical, but I don't think that's what you intended with this poem. However, I did like this line, "Life is so fragile like a snail shell" - very nicely used metaphor

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