why did logan get do weird after learning of sam?

this was great. keep up the good work and writing. i can't wait for more. is sam a werewolf or some supernatural. does logan or sam or anything with how belles parents were acting in the morning.

Ok, I'm done with the first chapter, but some tips to help you out...For some of the sentences, you used periods whre I think you meant to use commas, and also, i think you should use Okay, or Ok, instead of "K", there's also some capitilization errors, and when ending one sentence and moving on to a new sentence, you didn't put a space :(

But other than that, The story is great so far :D

Lol It has been a long awhile since you updated and I like this chapter its great :) I love the arguments between them two its soo funny

I hope you update soon I really would like that :D

great story so far i like it cant wait 2 see if they meet up with those guys again

Hm, I think I like it so far, but I will have to read more to find out. *hint,hint* Anyway, I also would like a better description of Logan. All I know is how tall he is and that he is good looking. I want to know hair color, eye color, face description, etc. if you can. Anyway, please update soon!

Ohh my gosh I see this is funny I love it alread

Please continue this story I cant wait to read more :)

I LOVE IT SO FAR! She's playing hard to get...me likey! lol!

Keep it up!

So good cant wait for the next chapter

good story. keep going.

this was excellent. keep up the great work and writing.

Okay, so your typing and editing are atrocious. Dialogue does need to end with periods. And there is entirely too much dialogue anyways. Names are always capitalized, and commas do exist. Sorry to sound harsh but this is so badly put together I would guess you wrote it and posted it all within 20 minutes. A good piece is edited. Mistakes will always be made, but they shouldn't be all over the place. The story idea is cute, though somewhat cliche, and I think you have a good idea. But it needs to be cleaned up. If you're to busy/lazy/just uninterested in doing it then get a beta.

Hey, I know this is your first time writing, so I want to give you some tips to help you out a little. (:

The story seems cute so far; I want to continue reading. However, you have some silly errors. You changed the point of view in the beginning of the chapter: you started out in third person and then changed it to first person.

Also, don't take short cuts when typing! Fully write out the word "you" and "okay". And during dialogue, don't completely cut out speaker tags and description.

I really like it so far though! Keep writing! (:

I liked the first chapter. Update soon!

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