Reviews for Obsession
PhoenixPhilosophy chapter 1 . 4/19/2008
read my poem "journal entry." I'm not telling you this so you can review it or just so i get a reader [although if you do, that's quite welcome] but because your poem is basically the same as mine. it's the same EXACT topic, except in your poem, something had actually happened with the narrator and his/her crush. mine isn't. I like yours a lot. It reminds me of that experience. very much. great poem.
dragonflydreamer chapter 1 . 4/19/2008
Reviewing for the Review Game's Review Marathon! (link in profile)

Wow, this is eerily similar to an event in my life, although I wouldn't go as far as to call it an "omsession."

I like how the the length of each line worked. They started long, there was one short one, then the rest were medium. I don't know if that was intentional, but it came out nice.I thought the transition from the narrator talking to herslf to asking the questions to the guy a little out of place. I think you should have stuck to one or the other, but maybe it's just me. You did pretty well with this overall!