|Reviews for The First Letter|
| Jesse the Storyteller chapter 1 . 4/20/2008
The style of this is so formal and old-fashioned... I thought it was written in like the 1800's or something but then you talked about having an IV in your arm and credit card debt... and so I was confused. Why is it so formal?
"moreso reminising" ... this doesn't make sense, and also doesn't reminiscing have a c in it?
"I feel apart." This is an interesting emotion, or at least an interesting way of wording it.
I'm assuming this goes along with another story or smething because you don't really explain any background story or anything.
Attack of the review marathon! (link in profile)