Wow. That was an awesome story. The title first drew me in, and I had a hunch that it had to do with the number of hours Daniel let his victims live. In any case, 48 was very well written, fast-paced, thrilling, and also surprisingly very moving. And disturbing, let's not forget that. The way you put the story together and weaved in bits of Daniel and Bianca's broken childhood memories was perfect. It didn't feel jarring or confusing at all. The bit about Daniel's unbalanced mother was very shocking as well, and her character - though we don't actually SEE her - is such a powerful, intimidating, dangerous presence that it makes me cringe every time she hurts her son. The mother is so full of hypocrisy, bigotry, and irony that I find her to be even worse than Daniel. The fact that she is a mother and a - God forbid - a church leader reminds us that appearances and titles can be deceiving. I will admit that as a Christian it was hard to stomach all of that, but I presume that readers who are smart enough will reason that Daniel's mother is not an example of a religious person but that of a psychotic, abusive, and hypocritical monster. It's even sadder to know that she sold her own son to her three "friends." Terrible.

No wonder Daniel turned out the way he did. I appreciate how you incorporated a bit of infamous history into 48, adding to the depth of the story. Those criminals, and many others, probably shared some form of a horrible upbringing that ultimately ruined them. It's a tragedy. Hate and ignorance only brings more hate and ignorance into the world. Some of the worst sociopaths were horribly treated while they were growing up, while they were still highly impressionable, and they were molded to become perfect reflections of their abusive guardians. One serial killer in particular, when asked why he killed, simply replied, "If only my elementary school teacher hadn't slapped me in front of the entire class and humiliated me, I wouldn't have wanted to kill people." Now obviously that isn't an excuse to kill, but it's sad to think that so much could have been prevented only if that teacher had set a good example on a growing boy. Daniel has suffered much worse, and still we do not excuse his actions as justifiable.

It's interesting to see Daniel change just a little bit. From the very beginning he is interested in Bianca's apparent nonchalance to her situation. But as she begins to show that she "cares" for him, suddenly he is confused of his behavior and he doesn't know what to do. He has plans but it seems that he keeps changing them on a whim to include Bianca in them. I had a feeling that he would admit that he "loved" her, though I question how deep his love actually is, considering how many times he's abused, tortured, and hurt her. I mean a guy who punches you in the head is definitely NOT in love with you. But in Daniel's case, because he is so bereft of love, it is amazing that he is even able to say that he CAN love. But his love isn't enough to stop him from wreaking havoc (which I presume happens following this chapter). I was expecting some kind of redemption, but his lack of remorse is just as satisfying. He's sick. Period.

Only a few things bothered me. When Bianca slept next to Daniel and asked that he hold her, was that all part of her plan to get him to develop a soft spot for her? Reverse Stockholm Syndrome? I'm going to assume that as it is the most logical explanation.

Also, the paragraphing and spacing was a little messy. I realize now (after getting off my iPhone and on a real computer) that you wrote the story in the style of a novel. However, because the website does not easily allow indentation, sometimes it made separate dialogue look like they were combined, and the same dialogue look like they were separate. I had to reread a few lines and scroll up and down a few times to get who was saying what.

Third, throughout most of the chapters it seems that there were a few unnecessary words included in some sentences, and then a few NECESSARY words EXCLUDED in other sentences. This made the general flow of the story a little awkward at times, but not so much that it served as anything more than a trivial distraction. The premise was still great. The action and suspense was amazing.

I hope my giant review didn't freak you out too much lol. Great job with 48! I do hope you write any new ideas you have for the story - maybe some kind of epilogue to wrap it up. But I entirely agree with you on your decision to keep Daniel alive. Committing suicide was definitely not HIM. Lol. He is way too cocky to do that.

Anyway. Great job overall!

Finally read the last two chapters. And the story had a great ending. The fact that they weren't together in the end was ncie and that she didn't change him was better.

It'd be good to revise the story, because it could be an excellent story to get published if you wanted to go in that route.

C.S.

48 was great I loved it! It was very interesting and I loved the ending. It was very fitting as to what Daniel would do. I would love for there to be a sequel because Daniel and Bianca is just so intriguing. It was very interesting where they ran away to, but I would love to see what else Daniel might do. Good luck! I hope to see more of your stories very soon!

WOW.

Superb job! I cried! I knew, that in the end, Daniel would tell Bianca he loved her.

You should really right a sequel.

I am on the edge waiting for it!

You know, you should read your ending, and listen to Awake- Secondhand Serenade, makes it twice as much heartbreaking.

Wow, excellent ending, just plainly brilliant..

Are you considering writing a sequel? because that would be awesome.

All in all, a wonderful story, I loved every single word of it.

This was such a great story! Any chance of a sequel?

I liked the end how it is! really enjoyed reading the story, powerful thought out plots.. kept me guessing the whole time :) great work!

OMG, This just gets better and better

I NEED more, I'm addicted to this story

I love the new chapter so much! It is amazing. I think that you are timing everything perfectly. There is just enough drama to it that the reader remains interested in the characters, but there is also enough suspense that the story doesn't get boring. Overall I think that it is one of the best chapters you have written so far! Cheers!

At first when I got to the end of the chapter, I was like don't tell me the story's done, lol, but then I saw that the night had just beging and was relieved.

Good chapter. I was surprised that Daniel killed all of those people, but not too surprised for some reason. If he killed girls without any remorse killing a bunch won't matter, lol.

Update soon.

C.S.

Oh my God! This is amazing! I am totally hooked and I've only read the first chapter. Your writing is so cool. And the title - wow. I love the whole idea of him keeping his victims for forty eight hours, that is so cool. Sorry for the people who are reading the reviews before the story, if that ruined it at all... Can't wait to read more! Favourites already :)

Sorry about the late review. I didn't get the alert for starters, then my schedule has been hectic, lol.

This chapter was really entertaining. There was more in it and the tension in it was good, intense.

In a way Daniel has so many issues that make him a sympathetic case, but his trying to kill thousands doesn't fit his profile, lol.

C.S.

Hey!

I loved the new installment of 48. Sorry I've been so busy or I would have read it immediately. It is so twisted, but so good. I loved the fact that he called the people in the staduim. I can't wait for your next installment. Personally I would like Bianca to come in again, but I don't think she necessarily needs to save the day. Good luck and all the best!

Rachelle

wow...intense

hurry up with the next chapter!

This is really good. Are you planning on updating soon? I hope so!