I love this story. What's going to happen! Please continue writing.

wow, there's not much that can be done to improve this story, it's wonderful. I especially love the way you're making connections between the characters and actually dwelling into the mind of a serial killer, that's great. The story flows beautifully, there's enough suspense to keep you reading to the next chapter

The only thing that could be improved is the fact that the style of the writing seems to have changed since the start, but it hasn't deteriorated, just become slightly different.

Keep writing, you have serious potential.

Marina x

It was kinda hard for me to follow this chapter at first, but I got there. In a way Daniel sounds like he doesn't know what to do without Bianca by his side to taunt.

C.S.

Cool chapter. I had the feeling that he was going to kill Elissa, like you had made clear, but I figured Daniel would do it some other way. It was weird that even after she stabbed the syringe in his back Daniel still took Biance with him, instead of doing something to her also.

And why do I get the odd feeling that there isn't a bomb in any of the stadiums?

C.S.

Wow, Bianca is just having a huge thrill ride. I can't wait to read more!

I loved the new chapters. They were really good. I like how the story has continued to change and develop. The characters have gotten much more deep. I think it is very interesting how Daniel's plans continue to change. I'm excited to see where you take the next few chapters.

A very interesting and chilling story. I liked the early chapters best, it kinda seemed to taper off in the middle, but with the new plot point of the stadium, it seems as if things will soon pick up.

I do wonder how you will weave the collective into the whole 'blow the crap out of 50,0 people' part though. If you can pull it off, I'll be truly impressed.

But overall, great work, this is a very engaging story.

Oh! That was so cute (for lack of a better word)! I love the angsty romantic side of any story, and especially b/c it is so uncertain on both sides. NICE xD

Another interesting chapter. It makes sense why he has fun killing women, though, I guess, it doesn't justify it at the same time. I'm a bit anxious to see what exactly his plan is going to be, and how Bianca fits into at.

C.S.

Well, this chapter was definitely interesting. It has me wondering where things are going, and showed a new light into Daniel's past.

C.S.

To do the font thingy..you have to upload under the Docx thing. It takes a little bit longer on my comp. But I am not sure. And Daniels plan is good, a bit diff from what he usually thinks, but I like diffrent(:

Another great chapter! Write more!

Well... shit. Lol. He's good. I didn't see the plan coming, at all. I like it, very smart.

I like how you have Daniel react to things. It makes the story believable.

Great job!

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WOW, this is an amazing story! I'm addicted to it, and I really hope that you update it soon.

I am in love with this fiction piece! It is so good. I have told all my friends about it, they love it as well. Please, PLEASE continue it!

ThankYou.