Reviews for His Slave |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I cannot tell you how much I love this story! :D It is written so well! I love Trent and Scott sooo much, especially once Scott started being nice! Their relationship was so sweet! You have both done an amazing job with this story, you should be so proud :D |
![]() ![]() That, my dears, was a cold cruel way to end the story. No Epiligue, nothing? D: I loved the story tho! So hopefully you don't take this as a flame. I just wanted to know more of what happened to them |
![]() ![]() ![]() Very well written, impressed so far. :) |
![]() ![]() AWESOME story, one of the best stories I have had the pleasure of reading...the story development and pacing was excellent, characters were wonderfully endearing. Thank you...sequel would be fabulous. |
![]() ![]() I just can't explain it but I find this growing relationship between Trent and the prince one of the most sweet, endearing and romantic of all relationships I have ever read (and I have read plenty of fanfics believe me)and I am really loving this awesome story so far. |
![]() ![]() just the kiss that happened between them was the most romantic and fantastically erotic moment even without anything sexual needed... great writing. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Yay! They get to be together again! I'm just so happy! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Noooo, they've been found out! D: |
![]() ![]() ![]() Aw, their relationship is growing. :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() I absolutely love this story, I've read it gawd knows how many times, and I'm terribly saddened to hear that it's been stolen from you. It is very hard, I suppose, to stop theft of online work, but I'm so glad you caught this. Thieves are sad, sad people that I have no empathy for at all. (I tried to locate said author, but couldn't, is it possible their profile is no longer in existence? I hope so.) On a happier note, lovely work with this! You wouldn't believe how much I love this story! I always come back to it, heck if this was a book I would most definitely purchase it! :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() This was an amazing story. How Scott and Trent fell in love despite their social standings? very romantic (doesn't help that I'm a romantic). Although I wanted a little more out of the ending it was still an amazing story. You two did an amazing job on this. Well done! |
![]() ![]() ![]() aww love the story, i like and dislike the ending lol i like it but i sort of want more, more then him just running to him, but i like it also but still want a bit more, maybe you can do a Epilogue? like a few years later with them together at the place (he's King now yer? after his father died?)or somewhere else (and have like a flash back of this day/chapter) then i think that would be good love the story but i would like to see what happens now after this chapter you know to see what they did anyway great story love it :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like the story but there is only one problem. The POV changes. They give you insight into the different characters thoughts but the are thrown around haphazardly and the reader is given no warning. You leave out details of Trent's action when in Scott's POV. You should let the reader know that you are switching POV's. Also include all of Trent's actions in Scott's POV and vice versa. Take this into consideration when writing a story in the future. The way you have it now you spend two chapters describing one event. It slows down the story and loses the attention of the reader. Better yet write as a third person viewing all. Not necessarily focusing on one person but capturing all. Doubling up in third person just seems repetitive and redundant and only works if everybody is in a different place or time. |
![]() ![]() Liked your story, thanks! |
![]() ![]() Omg the end! This story was so freaking wonderful, I just love when authors leave the end to the readers imagination. Awesome job. |