Reviews for Exile on Main Street
Fangirl chapter 11 . 3/27/2014
xD lol is Rabbit in the cat now... lolz?
R. Ficst chapter 11 . 6/8/2013
Hahaha, hilarious ending. For some reason the jumpy timeline and the pacing kind of threw me a bit, but overall, I enjoyed the story.
Life's Unexpected Turns chapter 11 . 9/22/2012
This is such an amusing story, the story is written in a style that is uncommon, but good. Anyway, great story!
Arya Yamamoto chapter 11 . 3/27/2012
Hilariously good. This story needs more attention than it got lol. Brilliant dialogue if a bit long. Outrageous characters that captured my attention with the first two chapters ) Love it!
Sundavar chapter 11 . 6/19/2011
Very interesting, I'll have to admit that I had a hard time finishing the story, though I am very happy I did!

Some more description and narration could be warranted in the beginning, a little more context would have improved the flow and allowed for the reader to become more attached to the characters.

I admire your ability to reveal something which has occured without needing to express it directly. For instance, the reader can infer that the cat, Jelly, now has the soul of Rabbit since Jelly's soul is now with Lali and Kaushal.

Overall a very nice story, Thank you for posting!
the sacred night chapter 2 . 2/2/2011
The parentheses are not usually confusing when it's just one or two lines, or when Kaushal is talking telepathically and Lali is talking out loud, but in this chapter it was tres confusing. There were a lot of times it seemed like they weren't just alternating, but like two lines in a row were the same person talking.
purplehost chapter 11 . 9/22/2010
I wish there had been a little more description about his transformation. Other than that, I enjoyed it.
Lexy-Kun chapter 11 . 7/28/2010
Hello !

So, I've read all of it in one sitting, and thought I should at least attempt to leave a small review.

I must admit I wasn't entirely convinced during the first two chapters, sadly I'm not entirely sure why. Maybe because I had a moment getting used to your grammar (which probably comes from the fact that english is not my mother language), and maybe it's also from the minimalistic way you have to present us your story.

After a few chapters though, I found myself gradually hooked and I liked your story better and better with each line I read. Your characters are interesting; I like the way the demon seems actually less evil in his deeds than the human. Having a eunuque as a main character is rather new as well, I really loved that twist ! (And, you know, having him get a "complete" body and use it to its full advantage was pretty great as well). I also liked the idea of a ghost cat and a live possessed one. It's great how Kaushal managed to get a body without actually hurting the soul in it (and after all, being stuck into the body of the cat you killed is probably the perfect punishment, isn't it? though, who never dreamt of being a cat?)

I was a bit disappointed by the fact that they didn't talk about how they felt about being a mated pair. But well, maybe the fact that they didn't felt the need to speak about it is revealing enough.

Anyway, good job and thanks for this story!
BlAcKMaCgICWoMeN chapter 11 . 1/16/2010
i love it but it so reminds me of sherlock holmes in a away i wish there was another story also what was l hinting at did he want to be marked as a mate hmm i dont well it was simply smashing 4/5
Curb Crasher chapter 11 . 10/18/2009
The banter is all so witty it makes me feel incompetent in a good way. Sweet ending! (Not sweet as in awesome, but sweet as in sweet. I mean, it was awesome, too, but when sweet means awesome I always imagine some annoying surfer-dude voice, and I can't stand those. . . .)
Amindaya chapter 11 . 2/24/2009
That was QUITE amazing. It's like a minimalist style, mostly conversation, and even then, you got the point across so perfectly! And the dialogue is so gosh darn witty. :) The plot was perfect...no fluff, yet all entertainment.
Vera Dicere chapter 11 . 11/14/2008
o i really quite adore this. i was hoping the whole story that somehow these two would end up together, since it seemed so obvious they were well matched. lali was charming and wonderful, and kaushal was endearingly attached to lali in his own round about way. i will admit that i do kind of wish there had been a bit more, after they finally got together, or perhaps a bit of lali's thoughts, especially just before and after. i can't help bt wonder a bit about how he viewed kaushal, beyond his obvious fondness. despite these minor desires of mine, i quite enjoyed the story. very cute and fun. :)
theStarfly chapter 11 . 5/1/2008
Aha! I liked this, very cute story! :) I hope you use Lali and Kaushal in the future, they make an adorable couple :3
the sacred night chapter 11 . 4/27/2008
So glad to see another piece from you! I love your sense of humor, and your sense of eroticism doesn't hurt ;) The dash of mystery thrown in was a good choice. I only wish that part had been more developed. Almost all of the information we got about Rabbit was hinted rather than shown, and I'm not sure if that was deliberate, but I would have liked more, personally. I liked the story a lot.
Qui chapter 11 . 4/25/2008
That was a delightful read!

'Possession is nine tenths of the law' indeed. I'm still snickering over that.

Constructive critisim: sometimes it's a bit tricky to follow who's saying waht in your dialogue. It's not impossible, nor is it the worst I've seen, but sometimes I'd loose track of who was saying what and have to count back lines...ah, basically, maybe you could try to put a 'so-and-so said' in now and again. Just something minor that you might want to think about.

Overall your story was fantastic, and I really enjoyed reading it. You're actually one of the first authors I ever read on FP, and every so often I worry that you've left for good, so it's nice to see that you're writing again/still, and I hope to see more of these two in the future.

You're amazing,

Qui
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