|Reviews for The World is Falling|
| End-of-forever chapter 1 . 5/28/2008
'too busy drowning in details'...so true. I really really liked this!
| Esther Jade chapter 1 . 4/29/2008
I can really relate to some of this particularly the "stumble on the stairs" and "the slip of the tongue in the classroom". It's funny how the little things get to you some times. You can hold it altogether and one small thing goes wrong and then you're crying.
I like the run-on line from the first to second line and the colon in the second-last line.
One thing I would change is to put stanzas in. The last three lines and possibly the first two feel like the could stand alone. There could also be a stanza break between "the tired scribbles on daunting page" and "Only the little things, so small".
| a certain slant of light chapter 1 . 4/29/2008
Wow. This is so... true. Then again, what else could I expect from you, m'dear? :P