|Reviews for Sick|
| fatbird33 chapter 1 . 5/15/2008
very interesting topic makes for a very interesting poem.
| Lauren Wolfe chapter 1 . 5/13/2008
Ahuhuhu. Too sad, too true D:
| XsilentXescapeX chapter 1 . 5/11/2008
Trapped in a mindless cycle:
Gorging myself on self-insanity.
i love that line and think it was a perfect ending.
| Esther Jade chapter 1 . 4/29/2008
This reminds me of a friend of mine who had a problem with over-eating. I think the lines "I want to tear...lighten/my body" are particularly effective. I also think the cycle image works - bit cliched but the way you express it in the third to last line works well.
One suggestion I would make is maybe changing the full stop at the end of the second-line to a semi-colon to create more of an antithesis and then the comma in the third line could be a full stop. But it's just a suggestion.
| wo bu ai ni le chapter 1 . 4/29/2008
Know how that feels..
| a certain slant of light chapter 1 . 4/29/2008
This is kinda... I don't know. Amusing? I would be if I hadn't experienced it myself. I like that, "gorgin myself on self-insanity"... Very nice.