I like the idea of this story and think it has really good promise but I just need to comment that you misspell some words and that sentences can seem fragmented or 'not right' at times. This isn't to say they're bad it's just you should always re-draft your work. I myself have probably made the same mistakes in my own stories so I'm only saying this from experience. It will make your story 10x better.

Lastly, just make sure to explain a few things in your story, eg- how do Marcianna and Caecilia understand the Celts? Do the Celts speak Latin and if so, how did they learn it?

I don't want to be too critical sounding but I hope you find my comments constructive because that's all I want, I don't want to make anyone's work look bad, I just want to help it be it's very best.

Awwww, oh my god the deep peace thing 3. At camp ( its a uu church camp) the chaplin would say those as vespers before every meal and then everybody would repeat and do the hand motions with her. Omg that brings up so msny memories thsnk you i miss camp so much.

I really love the idea of this story and the direction it's going in. Of course I wish your main character would stand up for herself more but I feel like that is how you want people to feel, so that really isn't a criticism at all.

I would like to suggest that you find a really good beta, who would also act as an editor to not only help with grammar and spelling but wording and phrasing as well. I find it hard to get very far in some places just because I'm a big grammar Nazi.

Again though, I want you to know you're a great writer and I really love the story.

I really love the idea of this story and the direction it's going in. Of course I wish your main character would stand up for herself more but I feel like that is how you want people to feel, so that really isn't a criticism at all.

I would like to suggest that you find a really good beta, who would also act as an editor to not only help with grammar and spelling but wording and phrasing as well. I find it hard to get very far in some places just because I'm a big grammar Nazi.

Again though, I want you to know you're a great writer and I really love the story.

I really love the idea of this story and the direction it's going in. Of course I wish your main character would stand up for herself more but I feel like that is how you want people to feel, so that really isn't a criticism at all.

I would like to suggest that you find a really good beta, who would also act as an editor to not only help with grammar and spelling but wording and phrasing as well. I find it hard to get very far in some places just because I'm a big grammar Nazi.

Again though, I want you to know you're a great writer and I really love the story.

i'm really enjoying this story. Caecilia is a good character, i hope that her step-sister doesn't end up with the the guy. I hope you update soon.

I've been really enjoying your story so much! I can't wait till you post the rewritten version. I want so badly to read more! I love Caecilia; she's so nice! I hope she ends up getting Salvian in the end...She so deserves him! lol Anyway, you have a really good story with some great characters and I can't wait to read more!

Aww... here I thought you could finally update... Anyway, I do hope you'll be able to upload the new version and new chapter(s?) :) I like this version, too, btw :D

Wish you inspiration!

I'm so glad to read that you will be updating this story. It really is brilliant and i look forward to reading more. I really hope that nothing happens between Salvian and Marciana. She's such a horrible person and i believe that she deserves all the hard work they're putting her through. Karma is good like that! hahaha

I'd like really like to see more Caecilia and Salvian interaction. I find Ceecilia so selfless that I want to shake her and make her stand up to her evil half-sister. Hopefully soon Salvian will be attracted to her more than he is to Marciana. I know that's only nature that he was attracted to her but I didn't like that too much. haha. He should be having those feelings for Ceecilia :o)

Look forward to your next update. Don't leave us in suspence for too much longer! :o)

this is amazing

you are a very talented writer

please update!

please come back and continue to write this! it's been so long and i really want to see how this plays out because it could just go in so many different directions! love it, don't stop now!

Plz update! Loving this story...keep up the good work :o)

This story is absolutly amazing! It is so well written and the characters are interesting and so enjoyable. I love this story. I hope to no end that Caecilia and Salvian maybe get together, because she is so sweet and she has taken to the culture and is smart. She is also very kind. I'd be sad if he chose to be with or win over Marciana mainly because she isn't very nice. Plus she's already married. But, I LOVE this story and can't wait for more!

I love that song! By Celtic Woman, isn't it?

This story is quite different from the ones I've read here. You write well.

Glad to see you updating! Like the story.