|Reviews for gunna miss your smile|
| Midnight In Eden chapter 1 . 5/21/2008
Okay, while I like the general idea and there are some great strengths to this piece you are using some very common and dull phrases that could easily be condensed or made more interesting.
1st stanza: "the way you do" could simply be "like you"
2nd stanza: "that much" could be expanded or clarified to make it more interesting.
3rd stanza: "i don't really don't know" doesn't actually make sense.
4th stanza: "you won't be there" could be "you're gone"
Basically this could be a lot more interesting is you gave a handful of specifics, injected some imagery and let on a little more. Right now it's vague and because of that it's hard to relate to this poem.
| lymli chapter 1 . 5/18/2008
it's sweet like a first love.