Reviews for Pancakes and other sweets
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 5/24/2008
Ok... it's hard to tell where the chorus ends... maybe bold the whole chorus or separate it out with x or something.

What the hell I was thinking?... was I

I like how you switch from rose to raindrop because it was really interesting. I also love the last line and the title was really interesting. Nice job!

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AK the Twilight chapter 1 . 5/7/2008
Okay, this really had nothing to do with Pancakes.

Oh well.

This song's chorus is great and I love the fierce descriptions in the whole song. The words feel unique and were definitely highlights. This would go great with music; I can picture the lyrics being sung easily.

Great job with this one. It was a treat.