Reviews for Racism
foreverandeversoul chapter 1 . 10/19/2010
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NearlyPrescient chapter 1 . 7/27/2010
it's so short and simple that it comes across as cryptic to me. I think it could benefit from expansion or further exploration of the ideas you suggest.
lijuan chapter 1 . 6/4/2010
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W. Griffin chapter 1 . 7/31/2008
Maybe you could write more, this definitely has potential! I like the alliterative aspect of line three... Perhaps make line one have some kind of slightly separated alliteration too, to make the poem's format be:

- Distanced alliteration (A) [this doesn't necessarily have to be a repeated "p" sound...]

- Rhyme (B)

- Distanced alliteration (A)

- Rhyme (B)

-W. Griffin
scarlet stars chapter 1 . 5/23/2008
A lot there in those four lines ;-)

Really should expand on your thoughts & make it longer, this has A LOT of potential...I agree with it :) Also, maybe consider changing the second line...I don't think "joy" really describes racism. Nice job.

-A Raindrop's Shadow