|Reviews for excitement climax anger depression|
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 5/24/2008
I love the alliteration throughout this, it's really well placed.
reach crescendo breath and sigh.. breathe would fit better in my opinion
but if i have you what to worry?.. what's
I like this a lot... it flows really well and is interesting. Nicely written.
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| Cindy Moon chapter 1 . 5/13/2008
It's definitely been a really long time since I've been on fictionpress, I never thought that school would consume so much of my life, but hopefully I can start posting again. In the meantime, I can read your work!
The diction is wonderful in this one.
-Cindy Moon *)
| Lenners chapter 1 . 5/9/2008
I like the first line. But again, there doesn't really be a focus at some parts, like the third stanza. What's that all about? It seems like you're going through this whirlwind of emotions. I really think you can express yourself better than this :] It is quite amusing how you repeat yourself, like "conflicts conflicted" and "yearn to be yearned". I love the last stanza, my favourite part My only pet peeve, you spelled pigeon wrong :p