|Reviews for no words, x2|
| DefineBeauty chapter 1 . 10/23/2008
i really really like the format of this piece! it works really well! i think that centering it was a very good idea because it wouldn't have been as effective if it wasn't, and the same thing goes for the parenthesis. they make it all the more powerful
i also like the fact that you tell a story in just a few words. it could actually be about a ton of things! whatever the reader wants to interpret it as really, and i think that's always cool in a story or piece of poetry. personally, to me it sounds like a really hard breakup.
i love how you tell us how this character is feeling in each and every line. i think each word in this is important and has to be carefully chosen to give the reader the correct emotions that you want them to feel. so good job with that
i think you have the perfect amount of punctuation in this piece, not too much, not too little, but just right. this piece seems to do really well without punctuation throughout it, but just in certain spots, so props for that because that can be tricky. also, i see no spelling mistakes or grammatical errors, so thats always a plus
all in all, i really love this piece and think you did a terrfic job on it! write on ]
| sweets555 chapter 1 . 5/7/2008
I like it, but I'm curious to know what's going on.