Reviews for On Existence
Hoodwynk chapter 1 . 6/19/2008
Pretty; fertile snow was a phrase that I loved
Hoodwynk chapter 9 . 6/19/2008
I always feel awkward reviewing a haiku because the words themsleves are flexible; as is the reader's perception. I'm not sure that I understand the connection between dirt and doors, though there are many possible ones... Besides any of this, It is a very good haiku and gives the existance bit a very new twist
Phantisaeii chapter 1 . 6/7/2008
This is probably my favorite out of your collection.

I admire your haikus.
DefineBeauty chapter 9 . 6/7/2008
this ones pretty col

i like the word choice except for when you say "barren". to me i think "empty" would fit better, just my opinion tho

but otherwise it paints a clear picture ] good job!
Untitled and Unfinished chapter 1 . 6/6/2008
very good! I really enjoyed this. I think that it's sad, but reflexs alot. I appreciated it! God job!
simpleplan13 chapter 7 . 6/1/2008
I like the last line because it seems very contradictory. Well done.
Mahone-chic-89 chapter 1 . 6/1/2008
interesting...creepy in a sense with the whole blood mention, but still very visual and unique. Good work!

dorkiee chapter 6 . 5/27/2008
I loved it! The last chapter was the best because it made me feel sort of crushed. Everything was amazing, and so got me to have another view on Life, Childhood, ect.

Maybe you should not divide it into so much chapters or add a little more to the chapters...
Baticul chapter 6 . 5/24/2008
Amen. I understand completely.
Baticul chapter 3 . 5/24/2008
Simple, powerful. I like it.
A Once Dead Poet chapter 1 . 5/14/2008
This is my favorite of this collection. It has blunt imagery (which I think you used well) and an air of mystery.

Miser Meaku chapter 1 . 5/9/2008
This is thought provoking. Better than most which provide meaning immediately. I like the contrast of fertile and snow. Good job.